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The Top Five Writing Mistakes Professionals
Make
by Judy Cullins
Yes, you know your subject. You also
need to think about entertaining your audience, and making your book or
other writing easy to read. If your writing lacks organization and
compelling, vital sentences that convince your readers to keep reading,
they will leave your book or website immediately. There goes your
"word-of-mouth" promotion.
Try my "Check and Correct" for these
top five mistakes
1. Stop passive sentence construction.
When you write in passive voice, your
writing slides along into long sentences that slow your readers down,
even bore them.
Before you put your final stamp of
approval on your writing, circle all the "is," "was" and other passive
verbs like: begin, start to, seems, appears, have, and could. Use your
grammar check to count your passives. Aim for 2-4% only.
Correct: "Make sure that your name is
included on all your household accounts and investments." "Make" and "is
included" — the culprits. Create more clarity with this revision,"
Include your name on all household accounts and investments to keep your
own credit alive after your divorce."
2. Stop all pompous language and phrases.
Well-meaning professionals often use
the word, "utilize." You see this criminal in resumes, military
directives and medical or lawyer documents. "Utilize not only puts
people off because we don't relate to "jargoneze," but because we want
simple language. Think of Hemingway who knew that one or two
syllable-words work better than longer ones.
When you aim at 10th grade level, you
make it easy for your audience to "buy." Attempts to impress your
audience with research babble or long words fail because they sound
unreal and create a distance from the audience. Your reader wants a
savvy friend, not an expert.
3. Show, don't tell to keep your audience
reading.
When you take the lazy shortcut using -ly
words like suddenly, or the adverb "very," your telling makes your
reader yawn a "ho hum" and stop reading. Instead show "suddenly." For
example, "When she saw the pistol, she ran and slammed the door behind
her, shows "suddenly." Instead of "Alice was fat," say "Alice's girth
prevented her from buying just one airline seat."
Circle the -ly and very words and sit
down with your Thesaurus and replace them with power words that describe
or show emotion.
4. Reduce your passive -ing constructions.
Think of a title that inspired you in
the past. I like "Jump Start your Book Sales" by Marilyn and Tom Ross.
"Jump Starting" lacks power because it doesn't ask for action. "-Ing"
construction implies passive. Next time you think heading, title, or
even compelling copy, think command verbs as sentence starters as well
as using other strong verbs and nouns. Keep your sentences active using
verbs in either present or past tense.
5. Take the "I" out of your writing to satisfy
your reader.
Whether you write a book introduction,
biography, chapter or web sales message (did you know these are part of
the essential "hot-selling points?"), keep the "I's" to a minimum. Your
audience doesn't care about you, only what you can do for them. Think
about where your audience is now — their challenges or concerns.
Remember to answer their question, "Why should I buy this from you?" Put
a big YOU at the top of each page you write. Write three or four
paragraphs. Then, circle the "I's" and vow to replace them with a "you"
centered sentence or question.
So instead of telling your story, (I
know that's important to you) put your story in the third person. Use
another name, maybe a client's or friend's. If you think your bio is
important, instead of placing a long passage on your home page, place it
instead, on your "About Us" page. On your book's back cover, put your
longer bio and photo inside the back cover page, so you can put more of
what sells on your back cover — testimonials and benefits. Get
everything you write checked by a book or writing coach to make sure it
sells.
You cannot only get more sales from
what you write, you can put yourself out there as the savvy friend to
your audience who wants a problem solved. In the long run, these
satisfied readers will return to you again and again — even buy your
products and services.
Copyright © 2004 Judy Cullins
Judy Cullins, 20-year book and
Internet Marketing Coach, works with small business people who want to
make a difference in people's lives, build their credibility and
clients, and make a consistent life-long income. Author of 10 eBooks
including
Write your eBook Fast and
How to Market your Business on the Internet, she offers free help
through her 2 monthly ezines,
The Book Coach Says... and
Business Tip of the Month at
Bookcoaching.com.
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